Essay strategy – Puneet Gulati, AIR 319 with 140 in Essay (2009)

Essay is often seen as a poor cousin of the other more important papers in the Mains Examination. While GS and each of the optionals are worth 600 marks each, Essay contributes a small 200 marks to the total. But just like the interview, these 200 marks often prove to be the Waterloo for many candidates. In CSE 2009, UPSC has been particularly strict in giving out these 200 marks. Not many candidates managed to score over a 100 marks and there have been a shockingly high number of double and even single digit scores in the Essay this time. While none of us can justify the extremely low scores given out by UPSC, I do think that there does exist a strategy for tackling the Essay paper, which, if adopted and implemented thoughtfully, can reap a decent 50-70% mark in the Essay. Such marks will ensure that a candidate does not fail to make it to the list just because of poor showing in the Essay.

The strategy that I propose for the essay is based on my own experience as well as what I learnt from my English teacher during my school days. In CSE 2009, I scored 140/200 in the Essay. I wrote on “Good Fences Make Good Neighbours”.

1. Preparation for the Essay – Regular reading is the only stable and time-tested way to prepare for the Essay. There is no short-cut to improving one’s

language. One must read and learn to apply what one has read. Those attempting the paper in English, should read the Editorials of papers like the

Hindu, the ToI, Indian Express, Hindustan Times etc. One should also try remembering some quotations that one comes across while reading books etc. Maintain a notebook/word document for keeping track of such quotations. Let me recommend here “Inspite of the Gods” by Edward Luce as a valuable read on India before you go for your Mains. Practice Writing Essays for those who are not very sure of their abilities to tackle Essay paper well. Write at least 4-5 essays before sitting for the Mains in Oct-Nov this year.

2. Attempting the Essay Paper

a. Choosing the Essay – This is the most critical but curiously most under-rated part of the paper. Choosing the right topic to write on is half the battle won. Spend at least 5-10 minutes carefully studying the topics. Many candidates pick up a topic and start writing and then realize they don’t have enough to talk about. They end up wasting time as they try choosing another topic later. This year there were 5 topics:

i. Are our traditional handicrafts doomed to a slow death?

ii. Are we a ‘soft’ state?

iii. The focus of health care is increasingly getting skewed towards the ‘haves’ of our society

iv. Good fences make good neighbours

v. Globalism vs Nationalism

The candidate must study each topic and decide which of these topics gives him the maximum number of ideas. Mind-mapping or jotting points may help. Take up each topic and ask yourself, “What can I say about this?” For some topics you’ll not be able to proceed beyond two lines. I felt this when I looked at “Handicrafts” and “Healthcare” questions. Both these essays are asking us questions – Do you agree with the statement? (explicitly in the case of ‘handicrafts’ and implicitly in the case of ‘healthcare’. In fact, all other questions are doing this, except “Globalism vs Nationalism”). Candidates must answer the question no matter which of these two topics they choose. Writing a general answer without taking a stand when the question is asking you for a stand will not fetch you high marks because then you would not be answering the question. Hence, please, please, please answer the question. In my case, I realized I would not be able to handle either of these topics even if I agreed with the statements because of very limited knowledge about the arguments ‘for’ or ‘against’ the topic. Having rejected these two topics, I examined the other three. I thought about the question on “Soft” State. It was an inviting topic but I realized that I would not be able to provide any interesting insights into the issue. Moreover, I was worried I may inadvertently overlook some important arguments. Hence, I decided to examine the other two questions – Good fences and Globalism vs Nationalism. Topic 5 offered a discussion based essay where there was nothing obvious to agree or disagree about except maybe that there is necessarily a clash of ideologies (this could be questioned), while topic 4 required me to take a stand. I spent some time thinking about the arguments I could offer in both essays and realized that ‘Good Fences’ offered me greater creative license. To me, this was important as I was free to offer a much wider perspective on it. In addition, I could recall the poem – Mending Wall (by Robert Frost….I had studied it in class X) from which the line “Good Fences Make Good Neighbours” was taken. Moreover, I felt that this essay would be attempted by fewer candidates because of the nature of the question. (Please note that this criteria helps only those who are fairly sure of their ability to handle the topic. If you are not sure of your language or knowledge about the topic, please choose topics entirely on the basis of what may be easier to handle)

b. Planning – Having settled on a topic of your choice, spend the next 45-

50 minutes planning your essay. Planning has some very important steps:

i. Identify Key Words – Read the topic you have chosen and identify the most important words in the topic. In my case, it was “Good fences” and “good neighbours”. Both these terms need some defining in the essay. So think of how you would address what are fences and what are good neighbours. Similarly, for someone writing on healthcare needs to define healthcare and

the so called “haves” of the society in India. Someone doing “handicrafts” should be able to identify what our ‘traditional handicrafts’ are and what is happening to them. A candidate talking about ‘soft state’ must know what ‘softness’ means in various dimensions of a State. Those writing on Globalism vs Nationalism” must understand both the terms very well and be able to express them.

ii. Scope of the essay – Often one needs to limit one’s analysis due to time and space constraints. Identifying the scope of one’s essay means identifying the issues that the writer will focus on For instance, the topic “Good Fences make Good Neighbours” can be interpreted in many ways. Neighbours can be countries, your immediate next-door neighbors, your colleagues in office or

could simply be animals living in symbiotic relationship in the wild. Limiting one’s scope means that one is going to focus on certain aspects of the issue although one recognizes that there is a much broader interpretation of the topic. For instance, “Are we a ‘soft’ state?” is talking about India as a “soft” state. This “softness” is visible in the external and internal security threats,

our response to threats, our very accommodative political system, our very flexible rules, maybe a flexible social system and some other dimensions. Having recognized all this, you may want to limit yourself to discussion of only security issues. The writer must be able to recognize the breadth of the topic but draw his/her own borders for discussion. However, given that we have 3 hours to write the Essay Paper, a reasonably wide scope for the Essay may actually give greater avenues to explore the topic. So choose a scope that is reasonable – not too narrowly focused, nor so wide that you need to spend a lifetime covering it.

iii. Planning your introduction – Spend time doing this. Recall any quotations that might be relevant. For me, lines from the “Mending Wall” provided me a good platform to launch my introduction. Your introduction must be clear and should immediately reflect that you have understood the topic. You should define / talk about the key words of the topic and what they mean to you. You should spell out the scope of your essay. And finally you should present your “Thesis Statement”.

iv. Thesis Statement – Thesis statement is your succinct one line answer to the Essay question. It may be simply “I agree with the statement” or a more refined and sophisticated complex sentence. For instance, for the handicrafts question, the Thesis statement (if you agree with the statement) could be “Despite efforts being made by the government and various NGOs, our traditional handicrafts continue to face challenges, which if not overcome, will verily lead to their slow death. In fact, the process may be faster than it appears at the moment.” This has clarified your stance right away to the examiner that you believe that a slow death for handicrafts is likely. (A candidate could actually take a view that the slow death is inevitable but something can be done about it to prevent it. Alternatively, it’s also possible to

argue that traditional handicrafts are anachronistic and needn’t be kept alive on artificial life support systems. Depends on the candidate’s perspective but he must justify.) Similarly, for the topic on “Soft State”, a thesis statement would be like, “Detractors may continue to accuse India of softness. However,

a closer look at the multitude of challenges and constraints under which our country operates may reveal that what is actually interpreted as softness, is nothing but our age-old philosophy of pragmatism and accommodation”. Another example for a thesis statement may be for “Globalism vs Nationalism” – “While ‘globalism’ and ‘nationalism’ appear to be extremes of an ideological spectrum, I believe there may not necessarily be incompatibility between them. The two may coexist comfortably and in fact, mutually reinforce each other. This view certainly calls for a closer examination of the natures of these two ideologies and this is what this essay seeks to achieve.” A solid thesis statement wins 5-10 more points right away and makes the reader / examiner keen to read the rest of your essay. Thesis statement is an indispensable part of the Introduction to any good Essay. It is like setting the stage for the onslaught.

v. Planning the body of your essay – The candidate must think of different dimensions of the essay here. Typically, this is the part where you need to think about the arguments in favour or against your stand. For instance, if your stand is that “India is not a soft state” you must have an idea about what might be the arguments against your stand which suggest that “India is a soft state”. Jot down both sets of arguments. You need to know both sides because you want to reflect that you understand both sets of arguments and are making a balanced assessment. Now take each argument, especially those that support your stand, and think of some examples, anecdotes etc. to support your points. (This is called ‘substantiation’) You can also take an example which might appear to be supporting the contrary view and interpret it in a way that appears to be supporting your opinion. For instance, in the “soft state”, a contrary view could be that India didn’t act against Pakistan after Parliament attacks or 26/11 unlike the USA which did after 9/11. But you could craft this into something that supports your view

that India probably acted to the best of its abilities under the constraints. Similarly, for the topic “Globalism versus Nationalism”, you need to think of different dimensions of these two terms. Globalism could mean economic integration, cultural homogeneity, dominance of western thought, international approach to problems facing humanity etc etc. Nationalism would suggest pride in one’s culture, nation, people, lifestyle, protectionism etc. Think of suitable examples. Also think of how you would reconcile the two ideologies if your stance is that there is no necessary dichotomy between the two. Mindmapping is a useful tool for this phase. Basically, this involves writing a point and drawing arrows around it with some examples or sub-points. This depends on the candidate. Some people like to do this while brain-storming for ideas.

vi. Conclusion – Think of a powerful conclusion to your essay. Something that ties up the loose strings and completes your analysis. You could end with a reiterating statement that reflects your stance or a quotation. You could also end with some recommendations…like in the healthcare essay or the handicrafts essay….some suggestions to prevent your analysis from being realized i.e. making healthcare actually available to all or preventing the death of handicrafts. For instance, for the “good fences” essay, I concluded my analysis by saying that “Much as I would like to share in Frostian romanticism of having a borderless, fenceless world where everyone lives happily, I cannot disagree with his neighbour’s grasp of worldly realities”. Then I quoted the last 3 lines of Mending Wall “He won’t go behind his father’s saying. He likes having thought of it so well. He says again “Good Fences Make Good Neighbours””. This was a subtle way of ending my essay.

c. Writing your Essay – Proper Planning Prevents Poor Performance. Once planning has been done, the final task is just to put down in good grammatically correct English (or the chosen language) all your thoughts. Focus on the grammar here. That must be as accurate as possible. Refrain from using tough words if you are not confident about their meaning. Simple, clear sentences are much better than complicated, flowery language which is hard to understand. The purpose of the Essay is not to show-off your language, but to show your thought process and your refined ideas. Focus on linking your paragraphs. Use connectors like – Moreover, In Addition, Furthermore, However, Nevertheless, While – to traverse from one paragraph / point /argument to the next. For giving examples, use different terms like – for example, for instance, consider this, notably etc.

d. Revising your essay – Once you have written your essay, spend at least 15 minutes revising it for grammatical and spelling mistakes and for making sure your sentences bring out exactly what you mean. Would you like to read an essay or an article in which there are mistakes or which you feel has not been revised by the editor? Similarly, the examiner also wouldn’t think very highly of you if there are glaring mistakes. Revision helps us eliminate these errors. I saw many candidates scrambling to finish their essays even at the last minute. This is bad practice. Finish your essay 15 minutes before time. You would have written enough. 1000-1500 words for the essay are enough to convey any idea you want. Anything more than this would be too much for the examiner to read and follow. Moreover, you yourself would tire out and will lose focus if your essay is too long. So keep it just the right length. This is broadly a healthy strategy to attempt the Essay paper. I cannot guarantee that this will help candidates score 140+ in the Essay, but I am very sure that a candidate who learns to follow this strategy will write meaningful essays and will not score below 50% in the Essay. This would mean that Essay will not be the reason for the candidate’s rejection. Some of you may actually get into the CSE list because of the Essay and one of your other high performance papers.

All the best.

Comments and queries are welcome.

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22 Responses to Essay strategy – Puneet Gulati, AIR 319 with 140 in Essay (2009)

  1. anaydwivedi says:

    excellent write-up…there were some glaring mistakes i committed during the essay and i was aware of them after i finished with my essay..i m really glad that puneet has covered all of them in the write-up…
    cudnt have asked some1 better to advise on the essay…i hope future aspirants follow his advice and whichever strategy they might be applying, basics have to be right…

  2. Puneet says:

    Thanks Anay for posting this on your website. I hope aspirants will benefit. The thing about the Civil Services Exam is that there is always room for improvement. Very often we feel that we did our best but weren’t rewarded appropriately. Sometimes there are genuine mistakes on the part of UPSC (and probably we can’t do much about it). But sometimes we get low marks because we aren’t able to figure out where we can improve. Your blog does this excellently. I think aspirants must remember that very often there is someone out there who has done better or answered a question better. Since it is a competitive exam, marking is relative and not absolute. I realise this even more after reading your answers for Public Administration. Another candidate, to score similar marks, must produce not just correct answers, but answers of similar quality. Keep up the good work. Cheers!

  3. Mitrabhanu says:

    marvellous!! I never know, so much brain goes behind writing the essay!!!
    By the way, One doubt about the thesis statement!! Is it something to be written after introduction and before the body of the essay begins?? For globalism vs nationalism, I made the thesis statement as my conclusion.

    • Puneet says:

      Thanks Mitrabhanu!
      Thesis statement is almost always a part of the introduction, typically towards the end of the introduction. It may be reiterated in the conclusion. We need to do this to make our stand and approach to the essay clear. See, an essay is like a project report where you set out to prove something to the reader through analysis. So you need to specify something like your “objective” which is your thesis statement.
      See, this strategy is what I would call a basic/safe/stable strategy to a decent essay. Candidates who are more dexterous and fluent with language can always innovate. However, for many, this approach would be safe bet if they learn and apply it effectively. Of course, some practice is needed.
      Hope this helps!

      • smriti says:

        thanks puneet for guiding as on how to excel in essay,if u have time and any model ans essay format u prepared for ur essay preparation,plz do scan,so that we can correct and gauge ourselves,where we stand today and in future.

  4. sandeep says:

    hey puneet…really appreciate the effort..nice write up..particuarly liked the statement of the essay testing the flow of thought rather than the use of flowery language…very true!!

  5. Ashish Srivastava says:

    Hi Anay… I am ashish,I am preparing for civil service with optional s public Administration & lit.of Hindi language.I have just left my job to prepare in Delhi.I want to write exam in hindi medium. So I just want to ask does pawan sir at sriram teach pubad in hindi as well ? I am just confused about pubad coaching ..If i do coaching in english I will have english notes & then convert into hindi will be a tough task. I have heard about Mohanty Sir and Uniyal IAS . Uniyal teaches in hindi. Which one will be best . Please suggest.

    • anaydwivedi says:

      hi ashish
      definitely write the exam in hindi if u r more comfortable with it…
      about pavan sir…i m sorry, he doesn’t teach in hindi…he would have certainly helped u but the problem is he doesn’t know hindi…
      y dont u meet him ek baar since u r in delhi…u can call him on 9911366520…and c wht can be done…
      i dnt know much about mohanty..but to be honest, all my frnds who went to him didnt give such a good feedback…i have no idea about uniyal ias…
      i guess the best thing to do in this situation wud be to find some1 who is taking or has taken the exam in hindi and enquire about the classes in hindi medium…

  6. Lalit Jain says:

    My problem is that I give a balanced view of both sides of a topic of essay and then give a conclusion based on my own judgement. Unlike as suggested by Puneet, I do not stick to one side and see the other side also from that perspective. Is it a right approach? I have not been able to get marks with it.
    Please help..


    • anaydwivedi says:

      hi lalit
      i think the approach suggested by puneet is correct…even i wrote both sides of the topic as my approach was to write as many points as i cud…
      but i always made it a point tht whichever side i took…when i wrote points opposing tht side..i put it in a way such tht those aspects didnt look as imp as the side i was supporting…
      try to practice essay writing during these months and get them evaluated by someone if u r not getting expected marks…mayb something else needs to be fine-tuned…

  7. himadri says:

    marvellous………… a magnum opus blog indeed…..

  8. PM says:

    Dear Anay,

    Kindly help me with reference on good books on Pub ad to be referred for Mains.


  9. Lalit Jain says:

    Will it be possible for you to upload any of your essays??

  10. Gaurav says:


    Do we need to do any underlining in the essay? And also someone told me that we can draw flowcharts also. Is it ok?

    • anaydwivedi says:

      hi gaurav
      i didnt underline in the essays…wasnt sure if we i thought it was better not to take any risk…it’s a divided opinion out there…half say u can half say u cant…so u never knw wht the examiner feels…so there’s no harm if u dnt underline, but if u do and the examiner feels might b risky…
      but as for flowcharts…i dont think u can… at least i havent heard frm any of the people i knw who made flowcharts in the essay paper…

      • Gaurav says:

        Thanks Anay, It will be of great help…
        Sir one more thing, can we break introduction/ conclusion across multiple paragraphs?
        There is a divided opinion out here.


      • anaydwivedi says:

        hi gaurav…
        no problem…it is not important whether u write 1 para or 2 paras….4 points or 6…the only thing which matters is the content and whether u have highlighted the keywords in the answer as i have mentioned in answer-writing for gs, psy and pub ad…

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